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Honestly, I don't see any sense in saying anything to her about it. She was the one who betrayed me. I did nothing wrong. I don't get what she sees in Brambleclaw. He is the son of the freaking evilest warrior ever lived. Well, almost. I shudder as I think of Scourge. I flex my white claws as I picture that son of a fox Bone ripping the life out of my father, Whitestorm, then Tigerclaw murdering my mother to use as bait. Brambleclaw's father. I realize with a shocking twist of pain. I look up at the sky to see if Starclan still see me, only to find clouds cloaking the sky in mysterious shades of gray. Sighing, I stop my search for the stars.

Maybe it will all be over soon.

I think as I slink up the hill that led to the shore of the lake. I stop in my tracks, picking up two familiar scents. Squirrelflight. I pulled my lips over my teeth. That fox-hearted coward.  I don't need to check the other scent- it was obvious. I peek out over the hilltop to spot the two rats on the shore, tails twined together. I feel like vomiting. Squirrelflight pushes her head under Brambleclaw's chin. I prick my ears and hear rattling purrs. My claws slide out, like razor blades. Brambleclaw leans in toward Squirrelflight and licks her ears. I can't watch anymore. I just can't. </P>

I turn around and whip into the forest, ignoring the burning in my lungs as I hold my breath. Maybe I'll wake up and Squirrelflight will be beside me. Brambleclaw will never have been between my claws. Maybe we would still even be friends.

I stop my fantasizing, along with my pumping legs. I sit on the edge of the land, where it drops to the river. I curl my tail over my tail over my paws, staring down at the water. Again, the thought of it all being over pulsed through my head. There is no stopping the hurt look that gathers in my eyes. Maybe there is a way to… never come back. I could escape… no. I firmly shake myself.

I gaze down at the water, running freely among the stones. It mesmerizes me so much that I find myself lying here for hours until the sun peeked over the horizon. I hauled myself up and made my way slowly to camp. I smelled a musty, smoky scent. Like a monster, except stronger and painful to breathe in. As soon as I realize it, a herd of appentices whiz by me, screaming.


Ah...boredom never fails me. This is what I imagine happening before the fire. Ashfur catches squirrelflight and Brambleclaw... ah... flirting, and then leaves and falls asleep for hours while they go back and he wakes up and, well... fire.

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VVLartist Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
"Ashfur hates brambleclaw because his father killed ashfur's mother" 

Yeah, as if brambleclaw had total control over who his father was and what genetic inheritance he has. Ashfur needs to get over with it and find another mate
StarClanPhotoGirl Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Great! Poor Ashfur though...
Lovesbooks Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2011  Student Writer
Wow, I feel so bad for Ashfur. I forgot who his parents were. :'C his life sucked.
XxSakiUchihaxX Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2011
wow great job this is really good
calimurr Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
lol thanks!
XxSakiUchihaxX Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2011
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